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RE: A promise of love

in The Ink Well3 years ago

You tell this story with feeling. I was deeply move when when the mother died. You describe the scene well, but you don't make it overly sentimental. I think that is what I find charming about your story. You don't tell us to feel sad. You describe a circumstance that makes us feel sad. There is saying, Show don't tell. You show a lot here.

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Thanks for reading my story