I loved your story. The moment I started reading it, I wanted to read more of it. Your story caught my attention and I had fun reading it.
Yeah, I noticed that you had a bit of mistake in referring Tino as “her” in third paragraph. But it's okay. I know you just missed it, and your story is still beautiful @radenkusumo666.
Thanks for the correction my friend. I've edited and fixed it. Thank you, I'm glad you like it.