This is a beautiful story with an amazing plot. I love the moral and emotional aspect of it.
I believe if you use google doc to check your work, you would see some few errors that can be easily corrected and try to use more description, also your punctuation marks. I believe if you can work on this, your next write up will be the best.
I feel so sad for Micheal and at the same time angry at him because he was acting a fool out of love. His love was one sided and true love should never be one sided. I hope he finds a woman more deserving of his heart