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Tony, a 15 years old boy had retired to bed after making a caricature of his Mom agonizing prayers as his custom is always, he fell asleep immediately. Suddenly, he saw himself before a panel of twelve giants headed by stern-looking judges who ordered one of the giants to play him a video. Tony was overwhelmed because he thought it was his favorite computer game he was about playing. But sadly, it turned out to be the video of his Life. The judges titled it "The scenes of Tony behavior to his mom".(Image not shown due to low ratings)
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In this story, Tony seems to have viewed his dream as a real-life cautionary tale, which has brought about a complete change in behavior. (And then he decides to devote himself to Christ, which is certainly an interesting interpretation of the dream.)
We often provide feedback on stories, and we have a few notes for you. Something is quite mixed up in your story. It appears that you have most of the story appearing above the image, and then the beginning is repeated again after the image, but the second version includes the end of the story. You might want to fix that so readers are not confused. Additionally, we usually suggest that our authors avoid overly religious themes, because we are a very diverse community of individuals who come from different ethnic and spiritual backgrounds.
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