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RE: The Ink Well Prompt #14: Railroad | Push

A beautiful story full of precise images of the world around the train tracks. Also of metaphors about the variation of feelings.

I liked this one very much:

The silvery moon looked at her soul with her one round, huge eye illuminating every secret, every regret. She felt naked and clean.

The symbolic death of a girl to become a woman (An Act of Passage on a train track; fantastic application of one of the "laws" of myths).

She will be left with the memory of Juan, who could not grow up.

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I appreciate your reading, @gracielaacevedo. You know I have met suicidal people. I thought about one specifically; he was always trying to engage in some project; he never finished anything but he was always dreaming.He was like Juan. As for María José, well I know many; they are strong and they have to move on. This yin/yang motive helped me out when I was really, really stuck.

Thanks for encouraging me to come back to my story writing :)

Suicide is such a difficult subject! I really liked how you made us see Maria's death and then told us that it was symbolic. Great solution