Hi @dele02. Thank you for joining us in The Ink Well, and good luck with your writing journey.
Here's some constructive feedback to help you. With a short story, even a very short one, we look for a story arc and resolution. Every good story has a conflict that is resolved in the end.
I encourage you to make use of our catalog of fiction writing tips. You will find guidance on how to build characters, integrate action and dialog, write story plots and add a story arc. Without a story arc, stories do not seem complete. So that is one of the most important skills to learn. Good luck and keep writing!
Thanks for the feedback...will definitely go through the tips!