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RE: An Inkwell Prompt story: The Magical Camera

in The Ink Well3 years ago

Welcome to The Ink Well, @exceltogaming. Fantastic story. I really enjoyed it! You have an excellent story premise, and write well. The metaphor of the lens for seeing life through different angles is great. I hope you continue to share your stories in The Ink Well!

One tip for you: In the context of one story, it's best to write in present tense as you do in the beginning, or in past tense as you do in various places in the story. In other words, you don't want to switch back and forth between present and past tense writing. It's confusing for the reader. Here is where you first switch from one to the other:

I finally get to it and take a seat inside. I sat next to an old man who looked at me.

For consistency, you would want to write "I sit next to an old man who looks at me." And then maintain the present tense throughout. I hope that helps you with future stories!

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Thanks for tip!

Happy to help!