A sweet story in the tradition of Romeo and Juliet! Thanks for sharing in The Ink Well, @miles101.
I have some feedback for you. Your story would be much stronger with some editing. For example, if you add some paragraph breaks to break up your long paragraphs, and start dialog on a new line. Also, we have a great resource in our catalog of fiction writing tips called Help for the Grammatically Challenged. It describes how to draft your content in Google docs, which will show you many of your errors so you can easily fix them.
Good luck and keep writing!
Thank you @jayna