What a nice, well-rounded story, @riottales. All of the elements are strong. The story has great character building, an excellent conflict, and the key elements requested in the prompt — action, dialog and narrative. I would have loved to get to know Delilah and Danny just a little bit more before things started going awry for them, as it would give weight to the challenges that occur when he begins to turn away from her. (As you may already know, I can't help giving some feedback and suggestions, even when a story is very strong, as this one is!) Again, well done. Thank you for sharing your story in The Ink Well!
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Thank you @jayna! You are absolutely right. It definitely would have made for a stronger story. I'll keep that in mind for future stories.