Hi @titapach73, I enjoyed your story, and you are very imaginative! However, it's a little bit hard to follow because of the long sentences that all run together, and some other grammatical issues. I really like your writing and would like to see more of your work, but I hope you will also take more time to take care with your wording and sentence structure.
We have some great tips that can help you with this in our writing tips. Specifically, please see the post, Help for the Grammatically Challenged. Good luck!