I was intrigued by this story, @treasure-joshua. I'm always interested when an author can make me care about the well-being of someone who has made bad choices and done bad things. But I really did hope that once he made the choice to straighten out his life, he would be safe!
This story could have benefitted from a little more development. We have some great resources in our catalog of fiction writing tips. For example, we have tips on developing characters in your stories, and integrating action, dialog and narrative. These resources can help you learn how to include the important elements of fiction in your stories. Good luck and keep writing!