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RE: What Have We Become?

in The Ink Well3 years ago

She didn't know she was falling for him, not until she found herself in his arms that evening, returning his kisses.

Phew! I really like this sentence. You captured rather nicely what is like falling in love. Sometimes, it just happens. I have not read much love or romance dominant tales, but this one was a great read.

She was so busy loving Uche that she didn't notice when he stopped calling. And now, death. No.

I like the complexity of these few sentences because I can clearly hear the narrator's voice and personality. It makes the moment all the more poignant.

Fantastic story!

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Thank you so much. I love that you had fun while reading. I believe my work here was well done.