Morning @Jayna; always the way, you read a piece over and over and you'll never see your own typos. In truth, I think this sentence originally did call for the 'she' before morphing in its new direction. Perhaps then, it's worth another detour?
"her breathing punctuating an otherwise silent night."
Have a fabulous day, Tim.
Nice! I edit my stories forever and then I look at them the next time and I still find something I want to change. I send mine off to publications, and it's always tough to say one is officially done.
That's awesome to hear you publish; where do your stories end up? Novels, or magazines or in other places? Academia? You may as well just call this the inquisition!
Ha ha. Well, I've been writing short stories off and on for quite a few years, @lordtimoty. Recently, I finally got serious about polishing them and submitting them to online journals and literary magazines. Slowly, they are starting to be accepted and published. It is a lengthy process! As they are published, I add them to this page on my website: https://jaynalocke.com/fiction/publications/.