It was an inspiring story, though I think it would be much more interesting if it had more dialogues, and also, I think it would help if punctuation were used so that it'll be easier to distinguish the dialogues from the narration.
He had let his family down, though his dad would say, Ben, you let yourself down. I have accomplished most things in life that are left for you.
I initially thought that it's an all narration story, but I guess the lack of punctuation just made it look like that. Anyway, it's a nice story, and thanks for sharing.