It'd be fun to redraft to shift between the two sets of characters - the kids and Argus - in a kind of dual narrative, a third person omniscience perhaps. It's definitely a story that could be rewritten in many different ways. I do like that ending as its a great cliff hanger and doesn't NEED expanding - all we need to know is he wasn't what we thought he was, or that anyone suspected him to be. I think it's really good!!!
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