This was incredible. Truly. I was devouring every last delicious word and construct. I love first-person narrative and write in it frequently myself, so I settled in quite comfortably to read your story. But it wasn't all warm cozy blankets and cups of hot cocoa. It was anything but that and I felt justly rewarded. Forgive me @riverflows, usually, there is a line or paragraph in a writer's post that stands out for me above the rest that I want to single out and comment on specifically, but with this piece, the entire story sings; a dark shadowy harrowing tale, but it sings it beautifully, and I find it difficult to focus on any particular element... although I guess I already mentioned the first person narrative which I think you executed with precision. Your Good Girl positions herself as the innocent, but she cannot remove herself from the dark shadow and stain that without her actions, her father would still be alive and that she has therefore taken the law into her own hands and committed murder. It all hinges on her intent of course and regardless of where the chips fall, some may still presume to call her good. !LUV !ALIVE
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Oh goodness, I'm so blushing! Honestly I love Hive for helping me hone my craft and I'm all up for feedback, but it blows me away when people say such nice things.
I often DON'T do first person, but this was the perfect voice to do it in and I really got into her character. In the end it couldn't be anything but - acerbic, aloof, defiant, bitter and intelligent, she HAD to speak to the jury for the story to work. I love playing around with this stuff - I mean, it never goes anywhere but I have fun experimenting with words and whatever comes out of my imagination, which always surprises me! Thanks so much again. You made my day.