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RE: Old Phone

in The Ink Well4 years ago

Like TheInkWell mentioned, it is hard to see what to suggest that will improve this story!

Oh boY! oh Boy! oh BOy!

This is one story that I hesitated to read at first, because it felt more like a diary thingy than a story piece, but when I kept at it for a few more seconds, i didn't regret at all.

Honestly though, I half expected the protagonist to discover that he was the same person who made the videos, perhaps a multiple personality case where the alter ego did the walks and recordings at night. But then you create another worthy angle with the direction it goes.

I also love the cliffhanger at the end.

Great work friend!

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Thank you very much! That's exactly the reason I left the ending open, so people can come up with their own meaning. Glad you enjoyed it!