Substantially better writing - good plotting and characterisation, skillful blending of history and politics to provide motivations for your characters, and without falling into the trap of the dreaded "information dump". Your women characters need developing, though, rather than relying on one-dimensional stereotypes.
Really good effort, well done, hope to see more entries from you.
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Awesome that I got your attention, and the compliments I cherish.
I'll definitely make amendments in my subsequent writes. I felt the need to rub in the female character but i was a bit worried the story was getting lengthened and might become boring to read. I didn't want the readers to lose interest.
Thank you for sharing this view with me.