This narrative is well written and on the whole, an enjoyable read, but it could do with a bit more balance - the use of dialogue to aid the reader's understanding of the relationship between the two lovers, and witness it's gradual breakdown, would have elevated the piece as a story. The tone/language in the closing dialogue also feels a little mismatched between them. His language feels very formal in dialogue and in the postcard. Another strange formality was her name: Emma, The First Snow? Was there a reason for this? I ask as the constant use of the formal title can be slightly jarring.
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Thank you for the tips! I'll do my best, and I've also created an introductory post for when I reach at least rank 60, as that's my goal.