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RE: Do It For Them… And For You.

in The Ink Welllast year

This was a very unusual take on the I miss you prompt, Balikis95. The opening hook was fantastic and well-written. Aspects of the story which followed, however, appeared underdeveloped and a bit disjointed. It felt like there were multiple themes that didn't quite tie up. Perhaps too many ideas thrown into a restrictive word count? I so desperately wanted you to continue with the story in the same vein in which you had started: good pacing, care and diligence over word choices and sentence construction. Something to consider is that there was no foreshadowing of her parents' death. As a result the prompt felt a bit like an afterthought.

Again, that opening paragraph was fantastic!

Thank you for writing in The Ink well. We look forward to more of your stories.

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Thank you for stopping by and for your kind words. Maybe there were different ideas setting in a restricted word counts. I will do better next time.

Thank you once again.