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RE: PERFECT TIME

in The Ink Well3 years ago

This story deals with several issues, and the reader is interested discovering how the individuals work out their problems. There is a mother, who is pressuring her daughter, and a daughter who feels that by the age of thirty she should be married. And then there is the boyfriend, who does not feel he can commit to marriage. This is a very relatable experience. Many people have been faced with the same issues.

Your story arc is clear, as is the character development. However, near the end, it's not exactly clear where the engagement ring came from. Is this the ring that Molly bought? Or is it a ring that Andrew brought? Of course what matters is the two young adults resolved their conflict.

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But the ring that molly bought to propose to Kaycee, her boyfriend was thrown away and the surprise ring from Andrew, kaycee's friend was being used by Kaycee to propose to molly

That's how it worked