That last line is great:
and a hot tear escaped it's prison and raced down my cheek.
The tear escapes its prison, but we know that your narrator is in a prison. He is no longer himself, nor is he in control of himself. He has one last free impulse, which escapes with the tear: Save Lara
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Exactly, you get it all and you put it in the best kind of words. His one impulse was to save her in any way possible.
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