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RE: Best boy-girl Friends

in The Ink Well2 years ago

Chris took a chance on expressing his feelings to Katherine after 10 years, ushering in a tense transition. The way you develop this situation through the dialogue feels very real. Both Chris and Katherine are detailed very nicely! However, it would have been nice to have some additional scene description to pull us into the plot.

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