Thanks for sharing your story in The Ink Well, @doubleworld. That is one expensive snake!
The story is a little hard to follow, as we are never told who is speaking. When we come to this part, it seems the person speaking changes:
Okay! I think I have to cut in here.
But we don't know who the second speaker is either. Just something to be mindful of in your writing. It's important to give the reader enough information to be able to read the story with clarity.
Thank you for reading and commenting on the work of other writers in the community!