Before we can curate this piece, kindly correct your image sourcing. The current link takes the reader to the iStock library instead of taking us to the dedicated page for the image concerned. It is therefore not clear whether or not the image is being used in contravention of copyright legislation or not. iStock images are not royalty-free, so if you did not purchase the rights to use this image then you will need to remove it from your post and select another image instead.
Hello, I am sorry about the image, I got the picture from pexel but it was under the istock section and I did not notice. I have corrected it now. Thank you.
Thank you for writing in The Ink Well and for making the requisite changes to your image.
That must have been incredibly frustrating losing two power banks in a row like that, especially when you had a strong feeling on both occasions that you should have done X and then did Y instead. Perhaps there is a lesson in there that your post is acknowledging. It would have been useful to see more development of the story in showing why you felt uneasy with your decision to leave your battery bank with your brother, and then to flesh out what actually happened to it under your brother's care instead of brushing over the detail here. It left me wanting more.
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Keep writing!
It was truly frustrating. Yes I see I could have written it better, I will do well to note the corrections.
Thank you 🤗