Great use of symbols in this story, @grindan. The steaming breakfast sandwich suggests the potential energy locked in by Charlie's self control. She can hardly contain her impulse to lash out against Brett's preoccupation with minutia. A storm rages outside. Wind lashes the window.
Charlie gets lost in her reverie, which takes her away from the sorry man with the small view. And he is lost as he tries to understand her behavior.
As she leaves, she pushes the glass door 'like an animal'. She is free. Poor Brett, confused, and alone in an empty cafe.
Good writing here. There were a couple of typos that would be easy to correct. Other than that the story soars. Thanks for sharing this memorable narrative with us. Thank you for supporting other writers with your comments.
Thank you so much! It's always such a trill to hear that my symbolism came through- I am working on developing my abilities there! Saying what's happening is one thing, making you feel it is much harder- I am grateful to the ink well for creating these challenges for the community :)!!
I have an acquaintance who is in publishing, who has made the joke that many writers can't spell/ use grammar properly. I thought it was a joke at least, until I started to try and write typo free... I can't do it! 🤣 I read my stories 3-5x before I post them, and still! I'm going on a scavenger hunt to find these buggers now! Thanks for whipping me into shape 😁