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RE: EVERYONE IS GUILTY

in The Ink Well2 years ago

That's a very unfortunate thing to happen in a workplace, where you believe you have built trust. You used a really nice analogy with the broken plate — it can be glued back together, but will never be the same plate.

Thank you for sharing your story in The Ink Well, and for reading and commenting on the work of other community members.

One tip: This story could have used a bit more development. For example, you could describe some of the "characters" in the workplace and some of their gestures in more detail.

Was that smirk or that hasty glance an admission of guilt.

What if you described how people seemed to be looking away from you more quickly than usual, and if someone who you will call "Charlie" (not his real name), shrugged and walked away. Sometimes just a few more details can take a story from good to great!

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I'll put this to good use on my next posts. Thanks for your continued feedback.