The weight of your MC's heartbreak is almost tangible in this wonderfully descriptive piece, although the piece felt like it needed some foreshadowing of the authoritative role that the pastor would play in their lives. There is a mention that both MC and his fiancee attend church, and that his fiancee listens to worship music but no indication that the pastor knows the MC or on what basis he disapproves of the relationship. Thank you for sharing your story with us in The Ink Well community and for supporting the works of other community members. Your engagement is appreciated.