This was a lovely lighthearted piece, with a tinge of sadness. The melting pot of personalities you bring together was a delight to read. It is always hard to enter a new phase in our lives - and college is a big one. For many it is their first real foray into independence and leaving home for the first time. Girlfriends are the best, aren't they? Let's hope that the girls still remain close and find time to connect across the miles and still meet up during college breaks. I don't want it to be their last time for them! To elevate this piece further, watch out for your punctuation, especially around dialogue and speech tags. You tend to omit your periods and commas. A spell check would also reveal a few simple corrections.
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I'll bear this in mind. Thank you.