You have a nice "turn of phrase," as we say.
As dusk crept in with a modest chase of the sun on the far horizon, Greg and Daniel left for the game house.
Interesting phrasing like that adds a really nice touch to a story.
Daniel has been played, it seems. The other gamblers pretended to be less skilled so he would bet everything he had. His plight is perhaps inevitable, but you do a nice job of character development, which helps to offset the very predictable outcome.
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Thank you for kind consideration