Welcome back to The Ink Well, Joyce. Your story had a nice structure and decent dialogue. It was a sweet tale of romance, and an easy read. Please do remember to use Grammarly to identify mixed tenses, missing punctuation etc as it will elevate the quality of your final draft, and try to avoid explaining yourself during the story, as it disrupts the flow of your story and amounts to author intrusion. If you need to explain a term or translate a phrase, perhaps place an asterisk or footnote number next to the phrase and explain it in the footnotes to your story :-) Once again, welcome back! We look forward to reading your next submission.
Thank you so much for this feedback.
I’m glad to be back.