Hi @karin91, as we state in our rules, we do not accept stories written by AI. Can you please verify that this story comes from your own imagination?
We would also like to offer you a few pointers. The Ink Well has some great resources in our catalog of fiction writing tips. We believe you may benefit from our articles on story arcs and plot weaving.
It would be wonderful to have descriptions of the monsters and traps Emily faces in the beginning, and to understand why other explorers are after the treasure— were there multiple copies of the ancient map? The paragraph beginning "The group arrived at the temple" could use some elaboration as well. What made the two work together? Filling in these gaps in our stories is what makes writing fun.
We hope these insights and resources will help you as you develop your love for writing.