Hello @lightpen,
You certainly captured the essence of a sinkhole in this story.
We are in a sinkhole of failure as a state.
You worked that in perfectly. And it does capture the sense of what you describe. Despair, failure, a people who are losing hope in their government and their ability to live peaceful, productive lives. You create a strong arc and describe circumstances clearly. There is action, as the soldiers surround the radio station.
Thank you for sharing this story with us. We appreciate that you have commented on the stories of others in the past and are confident you will show that support in the future. Thank you!
Thank you for your kind response. The encouragement goes a long way in making me better.