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RE: Cupid ’s arrow

in The Ink Welllast year

What a lovely story. Nicely imagined and structured. This was a thoroughly enjoyable read. Knowing the prompts, the budding romance was a little predictable, but I enjoyed seeing their relationship unfold. I particularly enjoyed the following bit about the naming of the book, which was a nice original touch:

Perhaps we should write a book about it, in case we lose our memories before they're born?”

“Not a bad idea, milady, and what do you propose the title of this book should be?” Xavier replied, giving the dog another treat.

“Oh, I finally got it!” Alex exclaimed after a long silence “Love, wheelbarrow, dog…”

Your piece would have been elevated if it had been edited for grammar and punctuation. You tend to use commas a lot to separate out thoughts in longer sentences instead of using a period. There are also quite a few periods that have been omitted in this piece at the end of sentences. Using a grammar editor to identify these issues and then ensuring that you correct them before publishing will improve the quality and flow of your work.

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I'll definitely work on the issuesThank you @inkwell