This piece was saturated with emotion. The ending was surprising given the build up. I sit wondering what reality convinced Kemi to snuffle out the rekindled spark? It would have added to the tension of the moment if you had showed what Kemi's life choices meant for her, including her decision to walk away at the end. There were also some interesting turns of phrase in your piece where it seemed you meant one thing but due to your choice of phrase or leaving out words, your sentences had the opposite effect. Watch out for this kind of thing. Proofreading is important. There were also several spelling errors and issues with grammar that could have been identified quite easily with an edit in Grammarly. The process of editing is very much a part of the writing process and the time invested will stand you in good stead.