Not a poor story - a stepping stone in your writing journey :-) We appreciate that you tackled more interesting subject matter in your piece. Bringing us something new and different was great and I would encourage you to keep pushing yourself to bring us something new and challenging for you to write. It had merit and a lot of potential. As a curator, I should have led with this so my apologies if the curation commentary came across without positive input. What has been shared with you is guidance that we hope you will take forward to your next piece. Bring us something different again, but next time, research a little more and ask yourself questions as you write... eg: why was the lab in a state of broken chaos? Then decide how you are going to answer that. Did something happen earlier in the story? Was there an inside job? If so, decide how to go about building in foreshadowing so it isn't a complete surprise to the reader. eg: was there a hint of dissatisfaction among workers, of espionage, of sabotage? When you start to ask yourself questions and then answer them, and then work out how best to include the necessary info in your story, you usually end up with a bunch of questions and answers that help you develop story lines, conflict and resolution. You also need to focus on a central character who can undergo a period of growth over the course of the story. Not many writers start to do what you do. Too many stick to their comfort zones. Keep pushing those boundaries. You will grow exponentially as a writer. I took the time to give you feedback I did on research because I care about your writing and your development. I look forward to your next piece.
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