Hi @menace123. Is this a personal story (real life) or is it fictional (made up)? Sometimes it's hard to tell! Since you wrote it for the fiction prompt, and used the #fiction tag, we assume it is fictional, but wanted to check since sometimes people are confused about the difference. The following may help explain why the story seems like nonfiction.
One of the conflicts in the story is not resolved. If this is a fictional story, it doesn't make sense to bring up that Tanya plays volleyball and is jealous that their father is only interested in the narrator playing basketball, unless that conflict will be addressed in the story. It would be a better story if this part of the story is resolved. For example, it could be that the brother talks the dad into going to her game.
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Thanks for the correction. I will make sure to improve my writing as I go forward.