Thank you for replacing your image, @mhizrutty. Your story is interesting, and very nicely told in first person. The narrator has a unique voice that helps to develop her character for the reader. But the story is under-developed. It sets up the problem that they do not know what caused their mother's illness, and now that there is a way to potentially help her heal, but neither of those ideas is realized within the story. So, it has the feeling of a story beginning without an end. It's important to carry an idea through and to provide a "resolution" at the end of the story. We hope this feedback is helpful for future stories.