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RE: The race

in The Ink Well2 years ago

This is an epic tale of facing the circumstances from an alternate angle, thus achieving the most desirable results. Although there are many lovely descriptions here, it still feels as if there are details missing. For example, it would have been wonderful to see the fight with the monster told in action, breaking away from pure narration.

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If you are referring to the moment of the encounter with the beast, indeed, we agree. I also think I should have stopped the narration at that moment and not been so hasty. I read the articles you recommend and will correct the text for a future publication. Thank you very much for the recommendation.