@odunola, thank you for sharing your story in The Ink Well. We have a tip for you. To improve your stories, consider writing scenes with action and dialogue. This story, for example, is all narrative, which is like a summary of a story, vs. true storytelling. If you read other stories in The Ink Well, you will find that most stories use this technique.
We have a helpful article on this topic called Action, Dialogue and Narrative: The Dynamic Trio.
Thank you so much for the correction.
I appreciate it.