Is this fiction or nonfiction? It seems from your response to @iskawrites' comment that this did happen to you. If it happened to you then it is nonfiction, and the tag on the story should be nonfiction. However, you wrote to the fiction prompt. In the future, please try to keep the fiction and nonfiction prompts on the appropriate blogs. No big deal, but it is important that you and the reader understand when events are true or made up.
The piece has all the elements of a story: conflict, conflict resolution, characters. It certainly does write to the prompt--hope. However, there are some issues with style. In two places you seem to repeat yourself:
lost my elder brother John who was 11 years old then to the cold of death due to an illness he battle with till he can't any longer. At the age of 7, he was diagnosed with cancer and even though at that very tended age,
and here
At the age of 8 years old, I watched how my only elder brother John suffer at the hands of death due an incurable disease called cancer or probably because it was not treated to the point whereby it was cured.
It is also hard to figure out exactly how old you were, because the information in the two paragraphs seems to be contradictory. A final note of interest, for future reference: you use the term 'faithful day'. You probably meant 'fateful'.
There are a few other issues. However, you do have a complete story and we do understand the motivation of the main character (who seems to be you) and the other people in the story.
Thank you for sharing this story with us, @precab.
Oh alright then
Thank you so much for this feedback.
I think I misinterpreted the meaning of fiction and non fiction. I will do much more better next time definitely.
Thank you so much for those advices
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