Hello @royaldiadem you have woven layers of interesting details here to create a captivating mystery. Very nicely done! We do want to mention that some of the errors here make the story flow more roughly. By placing out stories in google documents, we can see suggestions for both grammar and syntax errors. We hope you will consider using this free tool in your future stories. Thank you for sharing this tale with us, and for your engagement with other members of the community.