Nice story, @seki1. We recommend some edits before we curate it, however. It's very confusing in the second scene in Lisa's perspective because you shift from first person point of view (underlined in blue below) to third person (highlighted in yellow).
We also recommend, as always, that you read carefully through your story for errors that should be fixed. See the "Don't skip this step" topic in this month's newsletter.
I see...
So sorry about that.
I've edited it.