We have curated your story despite the fact that you have included a decapitation. The story would work fine without that line. We do not welcome stories of graphic violence in the Ink Well community. If you delete that line your story would be in conformance with our community rules. Here is a link to our recent announcement about violence and theinkwell community.
Otherwise, the story works fine. We feel the narrator's fear and are relieved that it was all a dream. Thank you for posting your story with us. We appreciate that you support other writers with your comments.