Your passages are wonderfully descriptive. Your first paragraph is very effective at setting the scene and place. You certainly are having an adventure in this story. Unfortunately, at the end, readers feel cheated because 'it was all a dream'. This feels like a cop-out to readers. Readers search for a real resolution to conflict. Your writing is good enough that you could have resolved this story. That's what we yearn for.
Thank you for sharing this 'adventure' with us. We appreciate that you engage with other authors.
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It was real. At the end, she returned home after she jumped into the river.