This is a story that produces amazement. To a huge problem, a very simple resolution. Thanks for writing this story for @theinkwell, @supo1.
I'm going to suggest that you check out our home page and stop by our tips for developing stories.
We often provide feedback to writers who are just getting started. The Ink Well has some great resources in our catalog of fiction writing tips. For example, we have tips on developing characters in your stories, and integrating action, dialog and narrative. These resources can help you learn how to include the important elements of fiction in your stories.
We also ask you to comment on the stories of at least two fellow writers.