This is a great story, @talon12. You really set the scene and atmosphere. The sense of an ominous future for these campers builds as the story progresses. We are not surprised by the gruesome outcome. However, in the Inkwell, gruesome must be kept at a minimum. This story would probably meet our standards on violence if there was not a chopped body and another roasted alive. Perhaps you can edit those details so these characters come to a bad end but not such a gruesome end. Refer to our post on violence to get a good idea of the limits we accept in violent scenes.
If you do make these minor edits, you can tag @agmoore and the post will be curated.
Thank you for sharing this quite vivid narrative with us.