This is so charming, @vincric. What an enjoyable read. It's a great scenario, and a very well-paced story. The kids were very fortunate that they escaped the accident unhurt and no one was ever the wiser.
We have a few writing tips to share with you. One is that you can easily fix errors in your stories by first drafting them in Google docs (which we describe in this article, or running them through Grammarly (which you can find in a search). It's a great way to detect grammatical issues and misspellings. For example, you use the word "were" (past tense of "are") in place of the word "we're" (contraction of "we are").
The second tip is about something we call "author intrusion." This is when the author inserts some thoughts or suggestions about how to perceive the story that cannot possibly come from any of the characters within the story. For example:
This was sadly a huge misunderstanding that Katt had, rather than hearing the proper name Quiche, she misheard Witch instead. Input that misinformation with her young highly volatile imagination that all children have, added with their earlier attention towards the topic of magic, this created a ridiculous delusion.
That is the author editorializing, instead of trusting the reader to follow the story line.
We have an article about author intrusion you might want to read in our catalog of fiction writing tips. Good luck and keep writing!
Thank you for the writing tip🙂, I'll be sure to read them up.