What a wild tale of betrayal and malicious intents! It is hard to imagine how uncle Ray envisioned this plan working out. Although this story is packed with detail, we are left with many questions. We recommend reading our article on building a story arc for information on how to solidify plot points.
You may also learn from an article in our catalog of fiction writing tips called Show, Don't Tell. This gives wonderful examples on how to develop characters, as well as give the reader a feel for the environment in each scene. We hope this feedback helps! Thank you for sharing your story with us, and for your engagement with other members of the community.