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RE: Sometimes Surprises Are Better

in The Ink Well11 months ago

Five stars for a lovely, inspiring Christmas story. The emotional dip in the beginning, where Mocha is abandoned, preps us for the surge of positive emotion that comes later. A good story has valleys and peaks. Your valley hurts, but the peak is more than ample reward.

We get to know the child well. His motivation and the parents' motivation are clear. We anticipate the change in the child's wish, from console to dog. Our anticipation is rewarded.

The end of the story--the note from Santa--lends just enough magic to make this truly a Christmas tale.

Very nicely done, @wrestlingdesires.

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Thanks so much for your kind words ♥️

The end of the story--the note from Santa--lends just enough magic to make this truly a Christmas tale.

I'm glad the jingling and plate of meat didn't spoil the surprise ending :)